One of the key elements in writing a press release is the headline – and the following caught my attention:
I’m pretty fond of alliteration and rhyme myself, but this seems to miss the mark in terms of clarity of communication. As a tongue twister, it is very hard to read, which I don’t think is a good idea for a headline.
Also we need to read the sub-heading to understand what the story is about:
Faulty forecourt tyre gauges inflate the UK’s tyre troubles 5 million UK motorists drive with under-inflated tyres risking millions of lives
Of course, this is a promotional press release – for tyre checks at Kwik-Fit. The company hasn’t bothered with a survey, but a spot-check of 1,300 cars at its own outlets to extrapolate that “as many as one-in-five (5 million) UK motorists are driving cars with under inflated-tyres, putting the lives of millions of road-users at risk everyday.”
As with the Sheila’s Wheel post before this one – let’s remember that even these questionable mathematical observations demonstrate the majority of motorists are driving with correctly inflated tyres (and without their hair in their eyes).